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The sky is burning
Blue stained with silken flame
Clouds floating above all
Threaded with gold

A ball of bright fire
cris-crossed with black wire
Strung between black houses
On a black street

And black birds
Are landing in black trees
Rustling black leaves
Clutching black branches
with black feet

And the white moon is rising
Over a world of grey
As the fire is sinking
Oh how silent does it rise

The sun is so pretty when it dies
looking out my window while talking to Matthordika i observed 'the sun is so pretty when it dies'. he said i should use that line before he did, so here it is. a sunset in the city.
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VintageChick121 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Student Writer
It beautifully describes dusk... This is a perfect bitter-sweet poem... :)
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Acinonyx-rex Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much :)
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Matthordika Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This... I can't describe how perfect this is. It gets better with every read, the more I think about it. This might be your best poem yet.
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Acinonyx-rex Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you. but don't forget, i haven't posted much of my poetry. this could just be the tip of the iceberg. but i do think it's one of my personal favorites, along with Ashes to Angels and one other i haven't posted yet.
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Matthordika Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That was the other one I thought about, Ashes to Angels. I think this one is just a bit better, personally. But I'd love to read the other, unreleased one.
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Acinonyx-rex Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i'll put them all up some day. well, not all, but yeah.
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Matthordika Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Put up all the good ones. Which is probably most of them. If not all.
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Acinonyx-rex Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
not quite all. unless you want to read the poem i wrote for school when i was seven or eight. it's about soup.
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Matthordika Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think I'll be okay if I pass that one up.
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Acinonyx-rex Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
haha. yeah, i think so too.
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